Noynaa塾コミュのほぼ毎日英文日記（しゅう）

2009/11/29

I have never written a diary.
Also, I have to write it in English.
It's unbelievable!

But at the same time, it is important for me,
because it would helps me to improve my writing skill.
Besides, it helps me to bring out myself.

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I am studying at my office today.
There is good location to study on weekend.

First, it is more silent.
I can study without any noises.

Second, I can use the Internet in my company.
For example, when I want to know a vocabulary,
I can search the meaning from web sites.

In addition, it is fee of charge!

2009/12/01

I work in a marketing research company, Intage inc.

Our mission is that
we collect Data from retail outlets and consumers nationwide,
analyze the Data, and provide the data for major consumer goods manufacturers to make market strategies.

Now, I've negotiated with all my clients about contracts next year.

The negotiation is very tough, because our company requires them
to raise **% of the estimate this year.

Some clients got suprised and others completely got angry.
Of course, I also got suprised.

Although it is difficult for me to negotiate,
Some contracts were concluded by the effort of explanations many times.

In addition, I almost finished to negotiate with one of the most important companies today.

I would get a deep sleep tonight.

Shu

I'm very happy today on business.

Three years ago, I lost the trust from a person who works at a company which is one of the important clients.
After that, I've worked more hard and carefully for the client to recover what I lost.
But, It was not easy for me to recover it.
She often got angry with my boss and me over and over, because of the distrust on us.
I'd gradually gotten tired physically and mentally.
I really wanted to run away from there at that time.

However, the situation has been changed.

Every year, our company collects questionnaires to evaluate it from all our clients.
When I watched her questionnaire, I was very surprised, because all of her answers are good.
I talked with my boss immediately and shared each feeling.

It was the most bitter experience I ever had.
However, the awful experience taught me never give up.
Also, it brought us a great pleasure.

I appreciate your advices from Sachiko-sense and Takamichi-kun.

Yesterday's extra lesson after regular one is very important for me,
because I could get what I have to do next.

First, I would writing e-mail to both the professor, Richard Florida and the school, University of Toronto.

So, I have to google to search for his e-mail address.

Second, I try to search for English courses by which students prepare for entering the university and get the certificate to enter the university.

さちこ先生

質問です。

学校や教授などに英文レターを書くときに、
自分のバックグランド、アプライに向けたモチベーションについて、

・長文になっても、詳細に書きますか？
・それとも、言いたい事だけ簡潔に書きますか？

これまでの経験の中で、アドバイスがあれば教えてください！

さちこ先生

あと・・・

今、気づいたのですが、
もう今週くらいに冬休み（クリスマス休暇）に入ってしまいます。

となると、今週19日に確認していただいて、送っても、
戻ってくるのは年明けですね。

そのくらいのスケジュールでもいいですかね？

>シュウ

ゴメンなさい！また見るのが遅くなりました。

>学校や教授などに英文レターを書くときに、
>自分のバックグランド、アプライに向けたモチベーションについて、

>・長文になっても、詳細に書きますか？
>・それとも、言いたい事だけ簡潔に書きますか？

私がいつもやるテクニックとしては
一番最初のメールに

１．何故あなたにたどり着いたのか？
２．あなたのどこに興味を持っているのか？
３．あなたに何をして欲しいのか？

を、熱っぽくかつあまり長くならない程度に書きます。

そして、自分はどんな人なのかも１，２＆３と絡めて
伝えて自分に対する興味と安心を喚起するように工夫します。

必ず相手から返事が来るようにするような
質問なども入れると反応率高いです。

そして、これはすでに知っている人も知らない人にも共通なのですが

鉄板１：相手を褒める！
具体的に褒める→事実（書いたもの、行った業績など）を上げて
→それに対する自分の視点（どう思ったか、何を感じたか）を述べる

鉄板２：自分の話は面白いところだけ！
面白エピソード
自分と知り合いになるとこんな利点がある
会わないとキミが損する！
･･･くらいの勢いで書く

次のコメントには実際に送ったメールと
返って来た反応を載せますね。

Regards,

Sachiko-センセ

それでは本邦初公開！
コレが裏技！
『サチコ先生の（ほぼ）100発100中返事が来る
「すごいメール！」の書き方』

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（著者はヒプノセラピストのフォーブス・ロビンス・ブレア氏。
著作は普通にアマゾンで知り偶然にも同日ブックオフで発見・購入）

Hi Forbes,

My name is Sachiko and I'm an event coordinator and co-editor of English/Japanese yoga website called "Hello Yoga!" as well as a bilingual yoga instructor.

I learned about your first and second books,

"Instant Self-Hypnosis:
How to Hypnotize Yourself
With Your Eyes Open!"

"Self-Hypnosis Revolution:
The Amazingly Simple Way to
Use Self-Hypnosis to Change Your Life!"

through Amazon Japan and found them very interesting. The reviews were great as well here in Japan.

I have a couple of questions that I would like to pose.

First, I was wondering if you were interested in having your workshops or seminars for Japanese audience.

As you might know, Japan now faces a serious problem of depression. The number of people who committed a suicide hit the record this year and the cause of death for many of those people was sadly enough misapplication of their prescribed drugs from clinics...

People need different perspectives. They need them now. And I thought your unique way of approach would give them a light of hope, especially your book says "instant".

Please advise me if you were interested and if so, please provide me with some brief ideas how you normally proceed your workshops, seminars or anything you do back home.

Another topic is your second book sounds very interesting but it doesn't seem to have yet translated into Japanese. If no one in particular is assigned, I would love to do the work. Also please let me know about this.

Please feel free to ask me any questions or inquiries you may have.

Looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Warmly,

Sachiko

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（そして、何とすぐに彼の共同経営者から連絡が･･･）

Sachiko,

I'm Robert Morrison, one of Forbes Robbins Blair's business partners (and his best friend).

Forbes is -- sadly -- dealing with his sister's passing (she was mentally ill, and she committed suicide over this past weekend). Ironically, you mentioned depression and suicide in your very kind email to him.

Two questions I know he'd have are:

* where you work/live,
* would the seminars need to have interpreters (and would they be in front of English speakers)
* (the other questions I'll let him ask you)

I talked with Forbes by phone, and he was very happy his books had a positive influence in your life. He wants me to thank you. :)

Until he writes you in a few days,

Robert
(c/o Forbes)

(次に私が返答します）

Hi Robert,

Thank you very much for your quick response.
I feel so sorry for the pass of Forbe's sister. Please send my deepest condolences to Forbes...

To answer your questions...

* where you work/live,
-I am currently based in Tokyo, Japan. You can reach me anytime at +81-80-5650-1789.

* would the seminars need to have interpreters (and would they be in front of English speakers)
-Yes, they definitely need interpreters if you do ones in Japan. I can take care of the English-Japanese part, and my fellow instructor, an Australian, can do the Japanese-English part so that we can save a lot of time. If you want to hear my voice just to see if it's suitable for hypnotherapy, I can send mine or simply you can call me.

* (the other questions I'll let him ask you)
-Sure!

Please tell him these above with my deepest love and tell him not to hesitate to ask me if there is anything I can do to help him.

Lots of love...

Sachiko
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（そしてFINALLY!!フォーブス自身からメールが来ます）

Hi Sachiko!

Thank you for your patience. It's been a challenging 6 weeks.

The timing of your original email to me was very interesting. I had just suffered the loss of my sister with complications dealing with depression. She lives in another state. At the same time, I had just experienced great success with a client dealing with depression. It is a strange synchronicity.

So it seems that this issue has and will become increasingly important to my work as a hypnotherapist and possibly as an author.

It is also interesting that so many suffer from depression in Japan. Both of our cultures place a lot of pressure on citizens to achieve a lot. And it seems that success and pressure come with a heavy price.

I am currently developing a program for people dealing with chronic depression. It may be of interest to you, though I am a long way from finished.

My classes here in the states are pretty straight forward in discussing my findings with Instant Self-Hypnosis. And I do see how that technique combined with proper scripts, may be of great value to people with depression.

Let's continue to discuss this and perhaps as I develop even a few scripts for relieving depression, we might find an excellent reason for me to come to Japan. I'm, of course, honored and excited at the prospect of visiting Japan. A friend of mine recently returned from a visit. And I was awed by the pictures he took and the stories he recounted. I want to be certain when I do come to you, I have something to offer beyond just promoting my books: and perhaps concentrating on the issue of depression will be that offer. What do you think?

Forbes Robbins Blair

学校に送ろうとしているメール分の初版をアップします。
修正前ですが、ベンチマークとして。

読み返してみると、
・自分の個人的な経験や考えていることが少ない
・全体的に表現が曖昧
という反省点が挙げられます。

（もはや日記ではなくなっていますが・・・ま、いっか）

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Dear sir and madam

My name is Shu and I'm a office worker in a Japanese major marketing research company, Intage inc. for six and half years.

I'm writing to ask you some questions about Rotman School in University of Toronto.

During first two years in my company, I'd worked as a programmer to develop of sales information systems at a pharmaceutical company. After the two year, I've worked in sales division. Now, I have more than ten major pharmaceutical companies as clients like Japanese global companies and traditional ones. We share clients' individual marketing issues, support them to make marketing plans for developing goods and check marketing activities by our solutions.

***
We analyze and provide sales trend data collected from pharmacies and drug stores to develop clients' market strategies.
We conduct a variety of surveys to launch new products. For example, package, concept and product surveys.
We make forecasting models by analyzing their sales trend data.
We analyze sales activity data to plan sales strategies next year.
***

I am very satisfied with my job, because I could grow up with them.
On the other hand, through the experience, I start to think of trying new field of working.

So, I would like to study in your MBA programs, because you have the classes I can't wait to take; In particular, Integrated thinking and business design.

■integrated thinking
I am expecting to take this class, because it would be very important for me to learn how to solve the complicated problem.

I know that the course helps me to cope with problems that have a lot of serious concerns.
It would be the basis of thinking when I work in the future.

■business design
I've never heard the class, business design, around the world.
I would like to help companies not only improve or develop but also change drastically or build new business.
The class helps me learn how to design businesses that face several problems.

And then, I have some questions about Rotman School.

1.
Can I start to work at consultant companies and service design companies like IDEO and InnoSpa.
Can I work as an intern at these companies with your help?
Do you have graduated students who found a job with these companies?

2.
I would like to apply for your program, but I don't have English score of TOEFL ibt enough.
So, I plan to take ESL courses of U of T next spring and summer.

The course indicates that the students get B in level 60 class there, they can apply for graduate school in U of T without TOEFL score.
Like this, can I apply for your MBA program without TOEFL score?

End

Hi Shu,

Thanks for uploading your email draft.

メールの全体像からコメントすると

自己紹介
UTが提供するプログラムへの関心
そして質問

と、ストラクチャー的にとてもわかりやすいです。


次に相手に『魅せる』戦略を考えたいと思います。
私はこんな風にしたらよいと思いますがいかがでしょう？

自己紹介
↓
どうやってUTのコースを知るに至ったか
↓
コースのどこに関心があるか
(自分の解釈で合っているかどうか？
自問自答式にする）
↓
コースを終了して時点でこうなっていたい自分像
（コースの選択と解釈が合っているかどうか？
自問自答式にする）
↓
質問



ちなみに自問自答式は
I wonder if...
I was wondering whether/if...
などが有効です。

リストラクチャリングしてみて下さい。

サチコ先生でした。

ごめんなさい、この書き込み見落としていました・・・

了解です。

アドバイスを元に、再作成してみます！

そして、こちらはプロファイルづくりです。


初回は、

経験×人物
父親を亡くしたこと×家族

で作ってみました。

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My dad died, when I was four years old. It was the bitterest experience of my life. When sports events held in schools, I sometimes felt ashamed, because only my dad wasn't there. I was suffered from a feeling that I was different from my friends. However I've always been supported with my family.

First, my brothers and my sister have been kind and generous to me.
My big brother is approachable. He is ten years older than me. He’s always taken me on special little trips, such as Disney land, theaters and baseball stadiums. He even took me on his date! Also, the brother and I often went to the river that my family had often visited. In his car, he talked with me about past memories of my family that I hadn’t remembered His humorous talks always made me happy.

The second brother is my role model. He was a good soccer player in a famous soccer team of a high school. He got up early, went to the school for morning practices and came back late. When he was senior at the school, he was vice captain in the team and core player of the team. At that time, I also was a soccer player of a club in an elementally school. So I respected my brother as a soccer player. After eight years, I decided to enter the same school. And then, when I joined an amateur soccer team that he was head coach in. I was watching him all the time.

The sister is generous. She might know that I had the feeling that I was different from friends. She always supported me economically. For example, I hadn’t had my own bicycle during the elementally school. But when I entered a junior high school, she bought me a new bicycle. It was expensive, so she paid much money from her wages of a part-time job for it. But I lost it few days later by my fault. Of course, she was gave me a scolding, but next day she took me to the same bicycle shop for buying a new one.

Finally, I’d have to mention my mother. She is kind and taciturn to people. But at the same time she’s been powerful. After my dad death, she started her own private school. She’d worked as a Japanese teacher in a junior high school before she got married. There, she taught students several subjects such as Japanese, mathematics and English. After the school, she had to be mother. She raised four kids. She had all of us to graduate from universities.

Of course, my dad death is the bitterest things, but it makes our relationship strong.