英語天国コミュのwriting section's practice~~

I try to write sentence about "in some countries teenagers have jobs while they are stll students"without transrater, because I will go to Osaka for TOEFL examination on jun 30th.

Lets go~~~~~ please check my sentence!!!!!!!!!!

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It has been said "In some countries teenagers have jobs while they are still students". I agrre with this statemente. although students have to study hard,part time jobs have a lot of important things such as meeting variety people,earing some money,and good experience. but It is too bad that you work a lot of time.
We meet some people in the university or highschool while we are students. but the people is really limited.If you work, you can meet variety people.

ここまででリタイヤします。。。。次回がんばります（♛ฺܫ♛ฺ）すいません。。。。あいのりいい感じなので(*´∀`*)

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[1] mixiユーザー 06月27日 23:40

Must you write the sentence in TOEFL examination.
I don't know nothing about its examination.

I think you write the sentence very well.
But you did not yet complete this sentence.
I hope you will write the sentence once more.

[2] mixiユーザー 06月28日 20:31

That's great!!!
I think your sentence is well.
Although I can't catch your meaning.
What do you say at last?
If my skill of English is low, I feel sorry.

I cheer you!!
and I pray succsess of examination!!!!

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