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≪The buds of daffodills≫

The buds of daffodills
drooping their heads
with cold raindrops

Walking outside
and listening to pop songs
from headphones
my pace was
getting just a little longer

I sighed
as if I swept
all of the grey clouds
in my fatigued heart

On my way to home, I put
my feet
into puddles by intention

Under the hazy sky in April
my heart quivered like a ripple
wishing something to happen
but feeling timid slightly

I felt lonely
I felt like crying
just because it was a rainy day
wasn't it?

The buds of daffodills
tilted their heads
under heavy rain fallin'

Melody switched a ballad
so my pace was getting shorter
a timid feeling came down on me
drooping my head just like theirs

The rhythm of raindrops
beating my umbrella
mixed with sorrowful melodies and
made me feel like crying

Well, where should I go?
Do you know where I should go?
Walking with firm steps
on many cold pebbles
my body and soul were
chilled to the core

Lives of little seeds
waiting for spring breeze

The buds of daffodills
will begin to swell and
bloom toward the sky like trumpets

If it stops raining
and sunshine comes here,
can I forget anything bitter?
the roundabout path I've walked
a timid feeling inside me
can I get back myself or something
which I forgot somewhere?

Wave rings in a puddle
always vanish soon
if the bitter past in my heart
vanished like them
I would have been happy
and felt relief

Somehow
my heart has pain and sorrow

Weak heart
lonesome feeling
my thought
which I can't explain with words
I couldn't take care of them

So as to smile again
I croon songs
which remind me of what I really am

Whether I can't forget
my bitter past
which has made me cry

Rain will stop
the buds will swell
and the sun must shine
through a rift in the clouds

Goodbye timidness
Goodbye loneliness
rain or shine
slowly
I would walk my path
at my pace...
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