My family spent the great time last week!
We went to Disneyland in Japan.
Well, always there is visiting a lot of people usually.
Very nice many attraction in there. but the people like a too long line.
and waiting times I think like a never ending. then everyone terrible tired.
However the day was raining. people wear raincoat.
weather is bad. then some people go to there.
had waiting times a little! 15 minutes average.
I'm happy. also my family.
Ride a roller coaster my son & daughter first time.
They are very excited, jumping & laughing!
also I like roller coaster thrilled speed!
And my baby was a little cry. because dark and big sounds in attraction.
I hope we want to visit Disneyland again...at not good weather!
We went to Disneyland in Japan.
Well, always there is visiting a lot of people usually.
Very nice many attraction in there. but the people like a too long line.
and waiting times I think like a never ending. then everyone terrible tired.
However the day was raining. people wear raincoat.
weather is bad. then some people go to there.
had waiting times a little! 15 minutes average.
I'm happy. also my family.
Ride a roller coaster my son & daughter first time.
They are very excited, jumping & laughing!
also I like roller coaster thrilled speed!
And my baby was a little cry. because dark and big sounds in attraction.
I hope we want to visit Disneyland again...at not good weather!
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添削遅くなってごめんね。
>My family spent the great time last week!
My family spent a great time last week.
>Well, always there is visiting a lot of people usually.
Well, usually there are a lot of people visiting.
>Very nice many attraction in there.
There are many attractions which are very nice there.
> but the people like a too long line. and waiting times
>I think like a never ending. then everyone terrible tired.
ここは、ちょっとわかりにくいというか直しにくかったので、
いったん日本語に直してから英訳してみました。
人々は長い列を作り、待つのが好きだ。
Many people over there like to make a very long line and wait a long time.
まるで終りがないようだった。
It seemed like never end.
そしてみんなひどくつかれた。
Then everyone got terribly tired.
>My family spent the great time last week!
My family spent a great time last week.
>Well, always there is visiting a lot of people usually.
Well, usually there are a lot of people visiting.
>Very nice many attraction in there.
There are many attractions which are very nice there.
> but the people like a too long line. and waiting times
>I think like a never ending. then everyone terrible tired.
ここは、ちょっとわかりにくいというか直しにくかったので、
いったん日本語に直してから英訳してみました。
人々は長い列を作り、待つのが好きだ。
Many people over there like to make a very long line and wait a long time.
まるで終りがないようだった。
It seemed like never end.
そしてみんなひどくつかれた。
Then everyone got terribly tired.
>However the day was raining.
However that day was raining.
>people wear raincoat.
People wore raincoats.
>weather is bad. then some people go to there.
Because weather was bad, there were not so many people.
>had waiting times a little! 15 minutes average.
We didn't have to wait so long, and the waiting times were 15 minutes average.
>I'm happy. also my family.
I was happy, and also my families were.
>Ride a roller coaster my son & daughter first time.
This was the first time riding a roller coaster for my son
and daughter.
>They are very excited, jumping & laughing!
They were very excited, jumping, and laughing.
>And my baby was a little cry. because dark and big sounds in attraction.
Andy my baby cried a little, because of the darkness and big sounds of the attraction.
>I hope we want to visit Disneyland again...at not good weather!
I hope we'll visit Disneyland again... at bad weather!
However that day was raining.
>people wear raincoat.
People wore raincoats.
>weather is bad. then some people go to there.
Because weather was bad, there were not so many people.
>had waiting times a little! 15 minutes average.
We didn't have to wait so long, and the waiting times were 15 minutes average.
>I'm happy. also my family.
I was happy, and also my families were.
>Ride a roller coaster my son & daughter first time.
This was the first time riding a roller coaster for my son
and daughter.
>They are very excited, jumping & laughing!
They were very excited, jumping, and laughing.
>And my baby was a little cry. because dark and big sounds in attraction.
Andy my baby cried a little, because of the darkness and big sounds of the attraction.
>I hope we want to visit Disneyland again...at not good weather!
I hope we'll visit Disneyland again... at bad weather!
英作文のポイント
1. 時制に注意する。
日記は過去の出来事なので文中のほとんどの動詞が過去形になる。
2. 文型に注意する。
SVとかSVOとかSVCって覚えてるかな？
第１〜５文型であらわすことができる単文は、
主語・述語がひとつの文に原則ひとつずつ。
それ以上に付け足して述べたいときは、文章を区切るか
接続詞を用いて複文にする。
翻訳サイトなどは日本語の語順に単語の直訳を対応させて文章を生成するので、
英語として読んだ時にすごく不自然です。
文章の核となる主語・述語を意識してみよう。
文末にはピリオド、文頭は大文字です。簡単なようだけど抜けてるところがあるので
投稿する前にもう一度確認しよう。
自分で読んでわからない文章は相手にも伝わりにくいです。
色々盛り込むのではなく、簡単な文をたくさん書くことで表現してみる。
文法をマスターすることを目標に基本に忠実にいきましょう。
1. 時制に注意する。
日記は過去の出来事なので文中のほとんどの動詞が過去形になる。
2. 文型に注意する。
SVとかSVOとかSVCって覚えてるかな？
第１〜５文型であらわすことができる単文は、
主語・述語がひとつの文に原則ひとつずつ。
それ以上に付け足して述べたいときは、文章を区切るか
接続詞を用いて複文にする。
翻訳サイトなどは日本語の語順に単語の直訳を対応させて文章を生成するので、
英語として読んだ時にすごく不自然です。
文章の核となる主語・述語を意識してみよう。
文末にはピリオド、文頭は大文字です。簡単なようだけど抜けてるところがあるので
投稿する前にもう一度確認しよう。
自分で読んでわからない文章は相手にも伝わりにくいです。
色々盛り込むのではなく、簡単な文をたくさん書くことで表現してみる。
文法をマスターすることを目標に基本に忠実にいきましょう。
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