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(1) When I was elementary school, nobody want to be my friend, they would considered to choose me as their friend, I was discriminated everywhere.

(C) When I was IN elementary school, nobody WANTED to be my friend. They would NOT consider CHOOSING me as their friend, AND I was discriminated AGAINST everywhere.

(C) When I was in elementary school, none of the other children wanted to be my friend. None of them considered being my friend and none of them ever chose me as their friend. I felt discriminated against by everyone I met and everywhere I went.

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(2) At the one day lake was drought and we went to catch fish at that lake, and you known I was caught a very big fish, I and my grandmother were eated it for one whole week.

(C) ONE TIME THERE WAS A drought AT THE LAKE. We went THERE to catch fish, and I caught a very big fish. My grandmother AND I ATE it for one whole week.

(C) There was a lake near my house and one time it was affected by a drought, so there was very little water in the lake. One day, my grandmother and I went fishing at the lake. And you know what? I caught a very large fish anyway. It was so big, that we were able to eat off of it for one whole week.
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(3) I didn't have any friend at home, there was no any child there. My friends were only friend at my kindergarten that i never met at home except at school.

(C) I didn't have any friendS at home. There WERE NOT any CHILDREN there. My friends were only at my kindergarten. I NEVER MET THEM AT MY HOME.

(C) I didn’t have any friends at my home, because there weren’t any other children who lived near my house. The only friends I had were the kids in my kindergarten. I never met my school friends at my home.

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