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good morning.

I am puzzled about Christmas Drama draft.

so,please correct my draft.

When I was kid night in Christmas eve,I was looking forward to present for Christmas.

Today,night before Christmas.I am looking forward to lovely face for Christmas.

Draft what I want to say in japanese put my page.
Please check it if you could.

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[1] mixiユーザー 11月04日 11:05

I missed.

When I was kid night in Christmas eve,I was looking forward the present for Christmas.

Today,night before Christmas.I am looking forward the lovely face for Christmas.

Sorry.

[2] mixiユーザー 11月10日 23:31

first sentence maybe:
When I was a child, on Christmas Eve, I looked forward to Christmas presents.
On Christmas Eve when I was a child, I looked forward to presents.

what do you mean by lovely face?

[3] mixiユーザー 11月11日 12:51

Thank you for your reaction.

I see.

lovely face = I wanna give present allpeople. and I wanna see the people's happy face.

All people = sons or daughters or a lover , a love etc

[4] mixiユーザー 11月15日 12:39

Hmm, tough.
Maybe:
This Christmas Eve, I wish to see everyone's happy smile

[5] mixiユーザー 11月15日 22:29

How about 'On Christmas Eve, as a child, I used to look forward to the Christmas presents that would put a smile on my face; but now, I look forward to seeing the smiles on the faces of the people I love.' More complex sentences, but maybe a better way to show the articulation around the 'smiles', IF that was your intent. If not, I think alice's suggestion is perfectly fine!

[6] mixiユーザー 11月16日 20:20

> aliceさん

i see.

i am going to refer to your suggestion.

Thank you.

[7] mixiユーザー 11月16日 20:28

> s.thompsonさん

Thank you for your commet.

i think this sentence use in last scene .
may be after closing blind and only voice.

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