英語で苦労してますコミュの歌の英訳

　英語専攻だったのですが、学校辞めてからなかなか英語の勉強ができないので自分で和訳英訳しています。Mr.Childrenの「イノセントワールド」を英訳したのですが、「ここはこうしたほうがいい」「ここはいいと思う」など、感想やご意見をお願いできたらと思います、すみません＾＾；

http://www.utamap.com/showkasi.php?surl=35238　（日本語の歌詞）

In those days that we was able to hug each other behind in the evening of town fitted my mind
Thoughtless words sometime damaged people’s mind and you are not here now
Nowadays, I think tenderly of pitiful myself in the mirror
Ah, I am me forever and I will keep on walking anywhere with dreams
Is it all right? “Mr. myself”

The melody that flowing this heart everyday
It goes along the mind lightly and gently
I wish I could meet you somewhere before I climb a steep path with sunshine , innocent world

Recently, even the topics about supper are sullied by job
I found that I have lost myself watching things from various angles

Though I always balance the books in involved relationship
Ah, don’t you think it is good we sometime entrust our body with the wind? Oh, “Miss yourself”

I sing as thinking about seasons full of love beating by listless rain in June
I will show you my smiling face that I have lost without notice
And I will set waving feeling free beyond the rainbow

A piece of dream will appear in a corner of town go on changing now
And I will go on having a faint light in my heart tomorrow also
Is it all right? “Mr. myself”

The melody that flowing this heart everyday
It is sad and gently, so I feel painful in my heart
I wish I could meet you somewhere before I climb a steep path with sunshine
If we could meet, let’s smile and set it free “innocent world”
Innocent world that continue limitless　　
　