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Yukko,

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Today, I’d like to talk about Walt Disney and his works. Everyone knows Walt Disney who created Mickey Mouse and Disneyland. Now, Mickey Mouse became a super star all over the world. Why did he （success） succeeded in his works? Because he had a passion for (make)
making animations (and) although he had some troubles until his success. I’m interested in Walt Disney’s life and Disneyland history. I think (all) most people like Disney characters and Disneyland. When I was a child, my parents often took me Tokyo Disneyland and I used to watch a lot of Disney movies. Especially, I (like) liked “Fantasia.” I always watched it. (This movie was) In this move, Mickey Mouse became a magician’s pupil and the classic music was wonderful! I remember that I (made an impression) was impressed. And I (repeat watch) repeated watching Mickey short story. I learned various things from it.
Walt Disney didn’t only make some movies. He thought of the idea (make) to make a dream and magic kingdom. It was the beginning of Disneyland. At first, he made it in California in 1955. His dreams (filled) was fulfilled there. Last year, Disneyland in California celebrated the 50th anniversary. Then, Disneyland (opened) was opened in Florida, Paris and Tokyo. Recently, it (opened) was opened in Hong Kong. I think we (go to) have to go there, ‘and’ we can enter dream world. In Disneyland, everything is cheerful and fantastic. Everyone (enter) enters there, everyone (feel) feels happy. I think it’s Disney magic.
When I went to Australia, I had a Korean friend. She (likes) liked Tokyo Disneyland and Tokyo Disney Sea. (So she) She came ‘to’ Tokyo Disneyland few times but she (doesn’t) didn’t come ‘to’ Disney Sea. She said, ”Disneyland was very excited and great! Someday I want to go to Tokyo Disney Sea.” I often (go to there) went there so I (response) responded her “If you come Tokyo Disney Resort, I’ll guide you there.” ‘And’削除 I brought some (picture) pictures of Tokyo Disneyland and Disney Sea （so I）, and showed her and talked about it. I enjoyed it and I felt happy. Because I didn’t think that we can talk about Disney ‘with’ 追加different nationality person. I think Disney gave me a chance (I can speak her) of talking with her.
In the future, I want to work (for) at Tokyo Disney Resort and I’d like to take part in the project of it. I’ll improve something of Disney. So I want to be a like Walt Disney who (give) gave everyone a lot of dream and impression.

Hello, My name is Yui Iriuchijima. My mixi name is Yukko.
Today, I’d like to talk about Walt Disney and his works.
Everyone knows Walt Disney who created Mickey Mouse and Disneyland.
Now, Mickey Mouse became a super star all over the world. Why did he succeeded in his works? Because he had a passion for making animations although he had some troubles until his success. I’m interested in Walt Disney’s life and Disneyland history. I think most people like Disney characters and Disneyland. When I was a child, my parents often took me Tokyo Disneyland and I used to watch a lot of Disney movies. Especially, I liked “Fantasia.” I always watched it. In this move, Mickey Mouse became a magician’s pupil and the classic music was wonderful! I remember that I was impressed. And I repeated watching Mickey’s short story. I learned various things from it. Also, I liked Aladdin, Tarzan, The Beauty and The Beast and so on. Now I often watch them.
Walt Disney didn’t only make some movies. He thought of the idea to make a dream and magic kingdom. It was the beginning of Disneyland. At first, he made it in California in 1955. His dreams were fulfilled there. Last year, Disneyland in California celebrated the 50th anniversary. Then, Disneyland was opened in Florida, Paris and Tokyo. Recently, it was opened in Hong Kong. I think we have to go there, we can enter dream world. In Disneyland, everything is cheerful and fantastic. Everyone enters there, everyone feels happy. I think it’s Disney magic.
Also I think Disney is useful to us for communication with foreign people. When I went to Australia during spring vacation, I had a Korean friend. She liked Tokyo Disneyland and Tokyo Disney Sea. She came Tokyo Disneyland few times but she didn’t come Tokyo Disney Sea. She said, ”Disneyland was very excited and great! Someday I want to go to Tokyo Disney Sea.” I often went there so I responded her “If you come Tokyo Disney Resort, I’ll guide you there.” I brought some pictures of Tokyo Disneyland and Disney Sea, and showed her and talked about it. I enjoyed it and I felt happy. Because I didn’t think that we can talk about Disney with different nationality person. I think Disney gave me a chance of talking with her.
In the future, I want to work at Tokyo Disney Resort and I’d like to take part in the project of it. I’ll improve something of Disney. So I want to be a like Walt Disney who gave everyone a lot of dream and impression. I respect him so much.

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